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Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

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Our precious wealth - environment - is undergoing a plethora of bad phenomena by the negligence of people towards the natural
world
. I think the core of
this
 occurrence lies on urbanisation as well as fiscal problems and we can figure it out with the help of government's strict regulations which I will consider them in detail in the following paragraphs now. To commence, there is no iota of doubt that all cities, around the globe, have been becoming urbanized because of intense competitiveness among other development ones. In
this
 process most people forget the gist of life and only caring about money they want to earn and
also
 they have no time as they are all working or studying individuals.
For example
, a person who came from a rural area to the city and have lots of work to do, will not completely think about the natural
world
. Probably, because of
this
 kind of issues people are disregarding "their priority".
However
, if we on
this
 way, might encounter even more problems. There are two ways that people can learn the role of nature through.
Firstly
, restrictions, prohibition and even fining by authorities could be a better method to teach.
Secondly
, our natural
world
 itself can be the best teacher as we are suffering from epidemic viruses one in every 5 years which are the results of our ignorance.
Furthermore
, our younger generations who watch tv a lot can learn through shows and special movies how important the natural
world
 is. In conclusion,
although
 our natural
world
 is the most primary aspect of humane life most of us forget it. But there are some ways to treat it like supervising deeds by government and learning through mistakes resulted in sickness.

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