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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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The number of residents in large
cities
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 is growing exponentially, resulting in
traffic
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 congestion;
downtown
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 areas face these issues.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes of the
traffic
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 increment and suggest a few solutions.
Firstly
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, talking about the problem of large
cities
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, they face
traffic
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 congestion just because of a large number of populations. Even if a small proportion of
this
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 population travels by car, many active vehicles will be on the streets. There may be other options to
travel
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, but everyone loves comfort and creates
traffic
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.
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, most corporate offices are located in the
downtown
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 areas of larger
cities
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, and their employees have to
travel
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 there just because of their employment.
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, more than 30% of the corporate employees are working in
downtown
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 Toronto, making them
travel
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 by car and creating
traffic
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. To overcome the solutions to these problems, many initiatives are taken by the local municipalities of the densely populated
cities
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. The government is promoting public transport, which will help to decrease the number of active cars on the city streets.
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, they are bringing down the fares of these transport, so more people will prefer to
travel
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 by city transit. As the
downtown
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 areas are congested, the corporate buildings should be established on the city's outskirts.
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, in Montreal,
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 has decreased by 9% since the corporate giants established their offices on the outskirts of the town. To recapitulate, the
cities
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 will get crowded gradually, leading to
traffic
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 problems. It should be the government's duty to plan the infrastructure in
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 a way that it solves those issues.
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coherence cohesion
Be sure to have a clear central theme in each paragraph and use a variety of cohesive devices to enhance the logical flow of your ideas. Try to avoid repetition and incorporate a range of linking words.
task achievement
When discussing causes and solutions, ensure that each point is fully developed with ample explanation. Expand on your ideas with more specific examples and details to strengthen your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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