The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
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The bar chart indicates the
overall
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number of
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world
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the world
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population
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in India,
China
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,
USA
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the USA
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, and Japan in the time frame 1950 and 2002, with an estimation for 2050 based on the presented data. It is apparent from the information presented that
China
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dominated and had the highest percentage on the chart which covered nearly 23% of the total world
population
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in 1950,
although
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it
had
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slightly dropped to 20% in 2002.
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, it was estimated that
this
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figure will continue to go down by 5% in 2050. In 1950, India came
next
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in line to
China
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as the highest
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number of
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population
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the population
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globally
covered
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the
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15% of it.
Comparing
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to
China
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, India
had
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gradually increased its
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number of
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population
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the population
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up to 2002 and was projected to rise up to 18% in 2050. The USA and Japan just
covered
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hovered
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around 8% and almost 4% of the total global
population
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respectively in 1950.It is
also
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indicated that the
population
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of the USA will remain steady in 2050 and interestingly, Japan will make a considerable fall
of
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its
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number of
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population
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in the same year.
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,
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it is apparent that
China
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constituted the
population
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growth globally, it is
also
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clear that the government has been trying to control the rising of its
number
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of people in the near future.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, although, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, population, china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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