Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on the TV and internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

best way

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the best way

to obtain

knowledge

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about other

countries while,

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countries, while

some individuals believe that people

able to

can

get information about foreign countries via browsing and watching television, In my opinion people can get an adequate information about other countries

if they visit to

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if they visit

these areas personally. On the one hand, there are several reasons for why the majority of the people opt for

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

and sightseeing naturally rather than

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

vicariously.

Firstly

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, people would be able to make new connections and

friends which

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friends, which

are essential to country and people.

Secondly

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, many people actually watch programmes about places they have been to, or which they intend to visit

Moreover

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, when people destined to different areas, they gain

knowledge

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not only geographically but

also

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about cultures and as well as various customs.

For example

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, a study

have shown

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has shown

that when people travel personally to

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

countries, they get hands on experience about their heritage.

On the other hand

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traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

vicariously saves one's money and time. It is unquestionable that advance

technology including

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technology, including

internet and television have all

sort

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sorts

informations

a message received and understood

information

For instance

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, with the help of

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and

internet

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the internet

we can travel around the world.

In addition

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, if some people wish to visit difficult access

continent

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continent, such

such

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Antarctica which

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Antarctica, which

is hard to get

there thanks

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there, thanks

to harsh

weather but

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weather, but

they can obtain all

kind

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kinds

knowledge

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with the click of a button on the basis of

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and internet

Furthermore

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channels

lik

prefer or wish to do something

" Discovery" and " National Geo" can offer a wealth of fascinating programmes that can captivate viewers more than direct experience. In conclusion, while many people believe that there are some benefits to gain

knowledge

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about different countries through

Internet

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the Internet

and

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TV but

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TV, but

I believe HD images can not replace the excitement of meeting new people and discovering their culture.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

308 words

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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on the TV and internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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