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The environment we are living in is in danger due to various problems…so who do u think should be responsible for solving it? Is it the governments, organization or each individual?

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With new development in the country brings many benefits and profits, but it can even
cause
 various problems for our
environment
 because how it is being produced. In
this
 case we will discuss and proved with big picture how it is caused and who is right person or entity to solve
this
 issue. Well to start with, with growing population there is many cars on the roads which are causing a huge amount of toxic gases in the atmosphere which are harming our
environment
 and not only that many factory
cause
 air pollution. Even there are factory which throws waste in the water, which are very harm full for the
fishes
Suggestion
Fishes
 and they ever dump waste in land which can
cause
 too many harmful chemicals. To protect our
environment
, it is not just the factory or governments responsibility to solve it, it is each and every ones responsibility. We all should get up and take steps to improve our
environment
. Well
government
 plays a major role and they should take some actions as
government
 is formed by the peoples.
For example
,
government
 should take action on how the forest is being cut down and which are
cause
 drop in oxygen in the air and rise in greenhouse gases which turns into global warming. As for the companies,
government
 can put out some rules and regulation to which companies are obliged to follow.
This
 could create a safe
environment
 for the peoples rather than employing create problems later.
For example
,
government
 imposes restrictions in emitting smoke from factories so that it is more environmentally friendly. In conclusion, In my opinion
government
 holds the major role to solve
this
 problem, but we all should
also
 take responsibility to protect our
environment
 as steps taken by each and every individual can help in improving our
environment
.
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