In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products, such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a significant number of products made from
animals
like food or clothes can be replaced by other modern
way
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.
Although
I agree with
this
trend, I
also
argue that we still need animal products to some extent. On the one hand, it is morally wrong to cause
animals
to suffer.
To begin
with,
animals
are used to be the major sources of materials to produce
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outfit
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, until now some wealthy people in many developed countries still use
skin
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of
animals
for making their clothes.
However
,
this
is the modern century, so there are a huge of materials
can
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replace the
animals
’ skin.
Furthermore
,
the
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meat like
the
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chickens
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,
beefs
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beef
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,
porks
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can
replace
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by
the
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plant
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and
vegetable
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. It provides sufficient nutrients for our body and can
also
help us prevent
from
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a substantial number of problems
such
as
the
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high blood pressure,
cardiovascular
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and
really
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good for our eyes.
For example
, carrot contains a lot of vitamin A and can prevent people from myopia.
On the other hand
, animal testing has played an essential role in the medical
fields
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field
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. With the development of technology, we can replace animal
experiment
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with
the
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computer programs that could provide a significant number of results.
However
,
finished
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drug must be inspected by testing
animals
like hamsters before giving to patients for safety.
For instance
, animal testing has so far saved many patients the virus diseases by finding suitable vaccines.
To sum up
, people should stop experimenting on
the
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animal
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animals
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and find some other new medicals by technology.

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