In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products, such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is a significant number of products made from
animals
like food or clothes can be replaced by other modern way
. Fix the agreement mistake
ways
Although
I agree with this
trend, I also
argue that we still need animal products to some extent.
On the one hand, it is morally wrong to cause animals
to suffer. To begin
with, animals
are used to be the major sources of materials to produce the
Correct article usage
apply
outfit
, until now some wealthy people in many developed countries still use Fix the agreement mistake
outfits
skin
of Add an article
the skin
animals
for making their clothes. However
, this
is the modern century, so there are a huge of materials can
replace the Correct pronoun usage
that can
animals
’ skin. Furthermore
, the
meat like Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
chickens
, Fix the agreement mistake
chicken
beefs
, Change the wording
beef
kinds of beef
slices of beef
portions of beef
porks
can Correct word choice
and porks
replace
by Wrong verb form
be replaced
the
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apply
plant
and Fix the agreement mistake
plants
vegetable
. It provides sufficient nutrients for our body and can Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
also
help us prevent from
a substantial number of problems Change preposition
apply
such
as the
high blood pressure, Correct article usage
apply
cardiovascular
and Correct word choice
and cardiovascular
really
good for our eyes. Add a missing verb
is really
For example
, carrot contains a lot of vitamin A and can prevent people from myopia.
On the other hand
, animal testing has played an essential role in the medical fields
. With the development of technology, we can replace animal Fix the agreement mistake
field
experiment
with Fix the agreement mistake
experiments
the
computer programs that could provide a significant number of results. Correct article usage
apply
However
, finished
drug must be inspected by testing Add an article
the finished
a finished
animals
like hamsters before giving to patients for safety. For instance
, animal testing has so far saved many patients the virus diseases by finding suitable vaccines.
To sum up
, people should stop experimenting on the
Correct article usage
apply
animal
and find some other new medicals by technology.Fix the agreement mistake
animals
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