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In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 the current time of technological advancement; one of the most pressing concerns regarding the given topic asserts that whether it is true that teachers of
past
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the past
 were more likely to give
information
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 to their students as compared teachers of present time due to the advancement in the sources of
information
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? I
am completely disagree
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completely disagree
 with
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the
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 time and shape up my opinion by the end.
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 with, in the past era, there were not
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many
 sources of
information
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 available to students so the
teacher
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 was the only way for them for seeking
information
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 regarding any topic.
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, it does not mean that now, in the modern period; due to the availability of gadgets, modern
teacher
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 has no role in the development of the
student
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.
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, even a
student
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 can acquire knowledge from the
internet
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internet, however
however
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, he would not be able to understanding properly the practical operations of that
information
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 without the aid of
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teacher
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a teacher
the teacher
teachers
. Apart from that, Modern teachers are well-educated and
heired
having services engaged for a fee
hired
 a well
deservable
worth having or seeking or achieving
desirable
 and respectful place in
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 world.
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, modern teachers not only polish the mind of the
student
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 by digital
method but
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method, but
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 let them understand the social and moral values.
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, the modern study is so complex and harder than
past so
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past, so
teacher
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play
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plays
 a
greatest
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great
greater
 role in understanding the
student
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 each and every aspect of their
studies
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studies, then
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, how can it be said that modern
teacher
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 has no role to play in the education? In conclusion, I tend to believe that
teacher
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 is like a lamp who always show the path of the students and brighten up the way of their destination. Whatever the source of
information
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 is, without the guidance of
teacher
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, nobody can be success in his life
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