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What are the advantages and disadvantages of working from home?

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As the world around us is constantly changing, so is the mode of working. Apart from
traditional working model
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the traditional working model
, these days people have
option
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an option
 of working from the comfort of their own house. There are both advantages and disadvantages of the same which will be described in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, working from
home
 has numerous advantages. As our world is experiencing technological revolution
,
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,
 so is our work environment. Most of the task is performed on computer from power point presentations to designing which can be easily carried out on
personal computer
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a personal computer
personal computers
 at
home
.
This
 allows people to avoid unnecessary waste of
time
 in commuting, provides flexible working hours and quality
time
 can be
spend
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spent
 with family members.
Moreover
, a person can savour
home
 cooked meals rather than depending on outside unhealthy food.
Although
,
this
 has several disadvantages as well. As a person is working from
home
,
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,
 he or she is alone.
This
 can be a major cause of decreased productivity and creativity. One can become lazy due to the extreme level of convenience as the person does not have to travel
,
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,
 can function according to his or her
time
 and can even take the family for granted.
Moreover
, eating at
home
 daily without the company of
friend
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friends
a friend
 and happy conversations can make each growing day boring and dull. Having said all that I would like to argue that, there should be
fine balance
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a fine balance
 between working from
home
 and office. Office space should be designed in
such
 a way that they become more and more comfortable for the employees. Working from
home
 option can be provided for
few times
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a few times
 a month in order to benefit from it. With
this
 I would like to conclude that, people need to resign the work environment. There should be a perfect combination of work and
home
 environment
.
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.
This
 should be done keeping in mind the long commute hours, family
time
,
Accept space
,
 creativity as well as physical health of the employee.

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