Nowadays children watch too much TV. Why is this happening, and what can be done to prevent it?

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Nowadays, many children spend at least 5 hours sitting in front of the

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daily, which is believed to damage children’s eyes. 70% of school children have to wear glasses and people usually blame the

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for that fact. In

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essay, I would like to discuss the causes of

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problem and how to prevent it. Children watch too much

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for three reasons.

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, their parents are very busy. Many parents work very long hours, at least 10 hours a day so at the end of the day they are not only too busy but too tired to play with their kids. To entertain themselves, the children have to watch

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Second

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, children’s games and activities

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as playing Badminton and playing Lego require a lot of

time

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and patience. But the busy parents are usually not patient enough to help their kids enjoy the games by playing with them.

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, these children who are not interested in playing badminton and Lego have to turn to

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as a way of spending their free

time

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, many children are allowed to watch

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from an early age because their parents want to keep them sitting still. So they become addicted to the

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and do not want to play other games. To prevent children from watching too much

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, several things should be done.

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, try to get rid of the

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. When the children cannot watch

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, they will probably have to think of other ways

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as playing Lego if

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is available, to entertain themselves.

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, parents should spend more

time

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with their children. If I were the President, I would reduce the working

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of parents by 2 hours, which must be spent on playing with their children.

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, introduce the children to new ways of entertaining,

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as playing sports or drawing from an early age, which can be done with the help of the school. Schools should organize more activities for students to help them enjoy these activities so they do not need to watch

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in their free

time

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. In conclusion, children watching too much

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had led to many consequences and it had been caused by three reasons. And I have

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suggested some ways to prevent it. These can reduce the

time

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spent watching

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of children.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Nowadays children watch too much TV. Why is this happening, and what can be done to prevent it?

Your opinion

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A friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend and recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited before. say where you went, where you stayed, what you can do there and what the food was like.

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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than ot work for acompany or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?