Some people Consider that it is better to gift money to teenager as a present while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
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money
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play
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plays
a vital role in
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everyone's
life without
money
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we cannot buy
anythings
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any things
. There are split opinions
reagarding
with regard or relation to
regarding
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the topic
topics
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abound individuals believe that gave a
gift
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money
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to children is the positive point
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while another group of thinkers are against of
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the former proposition appears to be more rational.
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and
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will lead to a logical conclusion. To start with
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there are myriad of reasons which will
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elaborate
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argument
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but the most preponderant on stems from the fact that
gaving
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
having
the
gift
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money
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to children is
better
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the best
gift
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for
themselfes
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
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money
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and after children utilize for good purposes like as, some juniors buy books as well as toys own their choices and some save
money
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use when they stuck in any problem.
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in addition
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another
pivotel
being of crucial importance
pivotal
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is that abound families gave pocket
money
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to children and kids save
money
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after receiving
gift
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money
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.
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, they do not like totally depend on parents and if,
their
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there burden are reduce on families.Needless to say
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all these merits stand in a good stead.
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the latter view
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suggests
that there are some pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
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this, but
one of the most alarming
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ones
is that gave a
gift
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money
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totally negative point
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a totally negative point
on children.
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is to express
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some descendents use
gift
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money
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for bad purposes and they buy bad things and learn bad habits.
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it is apparent why many are against
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nuttshell
the shell around the kernel of a nut
nutshell
nut-shell
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nevertheless
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weighing the both the options
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I believe that there is no single conclusion still
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I take
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require as useful, just, or proper
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use of both hands.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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