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Shopping has become a favourite pastime among young people. Why do you think it is like that? Do you think they must be encouraged to do other things rather than shopping?

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Nowadays, shopping has become a favourite pastime among young people. But some people go shopping so much that
this
 activity creates bad effects on them. So we have to look at both sides of
this
 issue The
first
 reason for
this
 favourite pastime is they want to keep up with the latest trending especially fashion trending or else they will like they won’t be able to integrate into the society.
Second
, appearance is one of the things that catch everyone’s attention at
first
 sight.
Therefore
,
they
of them or themselves
their
 highly considered appearance and start to go shopping more to buy clothes or accessories in order to beautify themselves. In fact, social media
influces
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
 their way of thinking that they have to be perfect
everytime
Suggestion
every time
. That’s why most teenagers now wear makeup whenever they go out.
Third
, going shopping creates an opportunity to spend
time
 with your friends and family. Most people would love to spend
time
 with their family by going shopping and it allows you to understand more about the way other people dressed and more than that, the more
time
 you spend with your family, the stronger the bond is between you and them.
Beside
Suggestion
Besides
 shopping, you should play sports or doing voluntary work. By doing exercise, you can keep fit and being more responsible by being a volunteer.
Moreover
, volunteering
also
 helps you to gain life skill. In conclusion, shopping is a nice way to spend
time but
Accept comma addition
time, but
 other than that you can play
sport
Suggestion
sports
 or doing
social
Suggestion
socially
activities
Suggestion
Activities
.

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