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Nowadays shopping has become a new favourite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to encourage young people to develop other hobbies?

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Due to renovations of lifestyle, people are more likely to spend their
time
 go sh
op
Suggestion
going
ping which has already been a favourite activity, especially among young people. Personally, I believe
this
 is because of less activity left four young people and prime solution can be here to create more options to do. More and more youth are engaging in shopping and spending a huge amount of their
time
 doing shopping.
This
 all depends on low a
mount of a
Suggestion
a low amount
low amounts
the low amount
ctivities are left to do for teenagers and the left ones are not cheap enough to be engaged in. Places to spend
time
such
 as gyms and swimming pools and elsewhere are too costy
.
entailing great loss or sacrifice
costly
As a result
 of
this
 problem nowadays young people does
not want to s
Suggestion
do not want
pend their money on them and prefers to go shopping to buy something attractive or just to watch what has come new to the markets.
Therefore
, it is sensible to watch
this
 trend nowadays. I believe the situation can be eased by th
e
Suggestion
with
help of the government. More facilities may be on offer. Parks and garde
ns along mode
Accept comma addition
gardens, along
rnly equipped complexes can be good
way to d
Suggestion
a good way
edicate leisure
time
.
For example
, American youngsters increased their visits to
such
 places when shopping resulted in less visits on it. Thereby, it would turn out to be a good measure to solve
this
 problem. To conclude,toda
y
Accept space
,
, shopping has become widespread among young people as a prime free
time
 activity. I think absen
se of a
Suggestion
the absence
absence
an absence
lternative is a ground for
this
 issue and onlyc
reation of t
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only creation
hem would some the day.
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