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The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005

The given table shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005
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illustrations
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the
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information about the ratio of
gas
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 type used to produce electricity in five Asian countries in the year 2005
Overall
,
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 majority of countries, the higher rate of consumption had other electrical items when compared to other
products
whereas
 the least percentage was petroleum
products
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 coal and lignite had peak consumption in Malaysia followed by nuclear
products
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is
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 about 42
percent
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.
Similarly
, in
Singapore
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 the ratio of
fuel
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the fuel
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 type used to produce electricity was nuclear and other material that was 42%and 39%respectively. In 2005 Thailand showed a noticeable trend in nuclear,
the
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 do not use nuclear for heat,
instead
 of that they mainly consumed other fuel items it was about 42%
along with
 that they utilized petroleum
products
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 about 36%.
Likewise
 in South Korea, 48%of hydro, wind and 33%of nuclear were used
while
 in Japan, they mostly utilize nuclear for
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that
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was
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 around 49% and only 3
percent
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 of petroleum and hydro, wind
were
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 used it was the
least
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last
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 one in Japan.
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