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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The table illustrates some details (date opened,
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kilometers
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 of route,
passengers
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 per year) about underground
railway
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 systems of different cities.
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, what stands out from
this
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 table is that the earliest available underground
railway
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system
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 was in London,
while
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 the
last
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subway
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 was opened in Los Angeles.
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, the smallest
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 and the lowest number of
passengers
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 were observed in Kyoto. Looking at the table in more
details
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, in 1863 the underground railroad
system
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 was put into operation in London which
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was the first
subway
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 to use in comparison with other subways.
This
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 transportation
recieved
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received
 775
million
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passengers
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 per year for carrying them to their destination at a
distance
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 of 394
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kilometers
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. After 37 years, the
next
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railway
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system
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 was opened in Paris. The route of
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subway
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 experienced
with
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199
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kilometers
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 which
was
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 twice as high as that of
underground
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the underground
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railway
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system
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 in London.
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, the
second
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 largest number of
subway
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 users was in Paris, which
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accounted for 1191
million
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. Tokyo established its underground railroad
system
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 in 1927. The big difference can be seen between the
quantity
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 of
passengers
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 and
distance
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 with 155
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kilometers
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 and 1927
million
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 respectively. The subsequent
subway
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 was opened in Washington in 1976 which was able to go
a way
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away
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 taken in getting from a starting point to a destination with 126
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.
This
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 underground
railway
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system
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 with 144
million
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 had less user capacity than previously mentioned subways. After only 5 years, Kyoto created
opportunity
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 of utilizing
their
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 own underground
railway
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system
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. The route of
this
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subway
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 was responsible for 11
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kilometers
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, which was the smallest
distance
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 compared to the routes of other underground railroad systems. The
last
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subway
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 was opened in Los Angeles in 2001
that
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this
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 underground
railway
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system
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 had 28
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 range and 50
million
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 passenger capacity
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometers, passengers, railway, system, subway, distance, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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