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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural areas, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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By reason of developing technologies people can journey to remote natural places. It is important to consider the pluses and minuses of travel in secret natural grounds. I think that the
adventages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
 are stronger than
disadvetages
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
. The most significant benefit of travel in natural place is
solitariness
. Many
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 live in movement and bustling it means that they are
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 in tension.
Solitariness
 helps them to improve their health and pacifies their
consciosness
an alert cognitive state in which you are aware of yourself and your situation
consciousness
consciousnesses
. Another benefit obtained from
scrutiny
Suggestion
the scrutiny
 of scenery. Scientists learn biota in these places. They can find
new sort
Suggestion
a new sort
new sorts
 of organism and explore its thoroughly it means that the can invest
the big
Suggestion
bigger
the biggest
controbution
the part played by a person in bringing about a result
contribution
contributions
 in
sciense
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
. One the minus side is human's patience. People who get used to domesticity don't endure to be in
worse circumstance
Suggestion
worse circumstances
.
Traveling
Suggestion
Travelling
 to forests and many dangerous places can be risky
gor
appropriate to; intended for
for
 them.
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