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Nowadays some people think that public libraries are not necessary while others disagree discuss both views and give your opinion and examples

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In
this
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 globalised era, educational centres
such
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 as public libraries has an important role to play in order to educate the citizens. It is indisputable that, these libraries are more required than movie
threatres
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
threats
 or any other kind of enjoyment places, while half of the population, think the opposite of
this
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.
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 essay will discuss the both views with the suitable examples, before going to the conclusion. To embark with the agreement side, libraries are required to utilise the time of youth, as they are
ones
Suggestion
the ones
 who need to put their energy into the right path, for
this
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, libraries give them the blueprint to follow their dreams. To cite an
exmaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, according to the Research Inc, 60% of the youngsters become successful in their future, when they prefer to go to libraries to search or read
book
Suggestion
books
, journals or much more. In
further
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 addition, these places provide the education and information with minimum registration fee, in regard to each and every subject,
moreover
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, nowadays libraries are even occupied with the numbers of computers to get an information on the finger tips. On the other side, to give an additional fee just to use the library is a complete
wastage
Suggestion
waste
 of money, as students and other people have an access
of
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to
 computers
at
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in
 their home, to gain an extra knowledge, so there is no need to go outside. For an
exmaple
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, according to the survey of
Technology Private
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Technology, Private
 Magazine, near about 90% of the public, have a personal laptop or tab, to gain an information around the world, about
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
.
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, libraries are often overlook by the government,
that is
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 why, authorities require the higher tax, to maintain the infrastructure of these
buiding
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buildings
building
, which
ultimatly
as the end result of a succession or process
ultimately
 cause the lower monthly income for the households. In my opinion, no doubt, there are some drawbacks of having the public libraries, but to light the right way to the adolescents, which are the future of the global, libraries are essential, even if the folks have to pay, a little bit of extra money to gain access
of
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to
 it.
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