Social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face – to – face contact in this century. Do you think the advantage of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, as the pace of modern life, together with the development of technology, there are many different ways that we can use to communicate with other people. Among of these, we cannot deny the convenience of social media like
Facebook
or
Twitter
, which help us to contact online
instead
of meeting offline.
Although
the benefits of
this
are varied, in my opinion, should be paid more attention to. On the one hand, it is undeniable that making a video call or chatting via
Facebook
are not only
easy but
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easy, but
also
helpful for us to save
time
when we need to communicate. Take Vietnamese students as an example, many years ago, when there was an announcement about timetable of new classes, students had to go to school to receive notice, which was quite inconvenient due to long distance or busy schedule.
However
, thanks to
Facebook
, these days, children can create
group
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a group
chat and send messages to others immediately without spending a lot of
time
or travelling a long distance.
Moreover
, for some white-collar officers, due to moderate amount of budget, they can have contact online with other partners from overseas without costing money on flights.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of using social media to replace face-to-face contact are significant, especially to teenagers.
Initially
, compared to students who just only use
Facebook
or
Twitter
as their tools of communication, those who spend
time
going out and
having chat
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chatting
chatted
chats
with friends benefit more from social activities
such
as making more friends, relaxing after hard
time
of study, taking part in many sport clubs and
also
developing their soft skills, which are very demanding for young people at
working environment
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the working environment
nowadays. More importantly, adults who abuse
Facebook
can
be come
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
quite reserved and easily meet internet fraud.
In other words
, taking a great deal of
time
just sticking our eyes on the computer’s screen or mobile phone to surf
Facebook
or
Twitter
can cause harm to our eyes and
also
demotivate
our brain productivity. In conclusion, despite of facilitating the communication between people in
digitalized
put into digital form, as for use in a computer
digitalised
world, I believe social media,
such
as
Facebook
or
Twitter
must be used in a moderate amount of
time
, if not, it can cause a negative impact on our daily lives.
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