The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows information about member attendance at various clubs in a metro city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart
indicate
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information about
member
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a member
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to
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four different clubs in a metro city for
a
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seven months starting from
January
to July.
Overall
, the most notable point is that
,
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the highest number of visitors
observed
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in the American club in the
Month
of June,
while
the lowest number of people visited Japanese staff in the
month
of
January
. As it is recorded from the data, the presence of French staff is around 68,000 in
January
, it inclined to almost 78,000 in the
month
of July. The least number of citizen visits
in
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Japanese staff,
the
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observed at 38,000 and
the
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ending
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of the
month
it
rises
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slightly by 4,000. Among all clubs, the
attending
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attendance
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of British club all over in the
month
of
January
61,000
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was 61,000
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and it rises to
the
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July by slightly and end
in
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at
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64,000. The showing
of
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American club is the most popular amongst the resident over the given period in a metro city. It is recorded
highest
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the highest
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total of visitors in June is around 97,000 and settles at about 84,000 in July.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words january, month with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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