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Parents are delaying childbirth nowadays than in the older days. Why is this? Do the advantages of late childbirth outweigh the disadvantages?

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Guardians are doing childbirth late in comparison with elder days. There are many reasons which impact the offspring birth. The matter has both side effects and advantages too. In previous centuries, Marriges had done in the early ages and due to situations women got pregnant at an early age which leads to various complications in their lives. Due to early aged
pregnancy
,
infant
 gets defects sometimes.
Moreover
, lack of education plays a major role in birthing
such
 as unplanned
pregnancy
, killing of
girl
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girl, infant
infant
, to forward family generation so on. In the early days, there was less health care treatment in comparison to childbirth so that the ratio of death was more of
infant
. Another drawback of early
pregnancy
 is the parents cannot focus on their career specially in case of women. Whereas, Now a day, delayed
pregnancy
 leads to various advantages
such
 as better planning of baby's life. Major benefits of delayed
pregnancy
 are the one way to prevent complications. Educated people now a day do not apply the killing of girl baby thought which is a positive point. Parents are now focusing on their career and being ready in financial status so that they can prevent the problems. In some cases, people are adopting
kid which
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kid, which
 is an excellent idea. Well organized and delayed
pregnancy
 is a better option now a day. In conclusion, I would say, delayed
pregnancy
 is a better option in comparison to early
pregnancy
. The benefits of late childbirth outweigh the drawbacks in various forms. The major drawbacks which are prevented is the death of the mother and
unborn
Suggestion
the unborn infant
infant
 due to young age.

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