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Governments spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals .Some people say that the government spends too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things .Do you agree or disagree.

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Needless to say
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pubic celebrations and
history
 plays a vital role in each and everyone's
life
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Thus
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high
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
High
 authorities invest
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 of
money
 on public events
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However
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 few individuals believe that the regime had better spend some funds of
this
money
 on other useful things
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I agree with
this
 perception and
this
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this
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the
 subsequent clauses. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of reasons behind
this
 trend
that
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that's
 why government spends a lot of
money
 on public celebrations like national holidays and public festivals
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To begin
 with
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there are some dates which
brings
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bring
 worth place in each and everyone's
life
 as
such
 dates are
relatedto
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related to
 our
history
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examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
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15th
august
the month following July and preceding September
August
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1945 is very
vaulable
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
 date in our
life
 because
on
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of
at
in
about
by
 that time
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our country got freedom thanks to
struggler
an energetic attempt to achieve something
struggle
 as martyrs Bhagat Singh
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Rajguru
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Sukhdev
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they sacrifice their lives for
country
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the country
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Furthermore
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another important reason is that it is
best way
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the best way
 to spreading knowledge about
history
 and
cuture
a particular society at a particular time and place
culture
 along with
tradition
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traditional
 among
new generation
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the new generation
 celebrating public events like national holidays and pubic festivals
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they may get knowledge about their past happenings which can help to them in order to associate with their
history
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Apart from
this
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they can gain knowledge about how our ancestors
scrificed
endure the loss of
sacrificed
sacrifice
 their lives for independence of our country
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That is
 why
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 high authorities spend
lion's share
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the lion's share
 of
money
 on public ceremonies
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For instance
, republic day
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independence day and so on
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Hence
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having ruminated
aforestation
the conversion of bare or cultivated land into forest (originally for the purpose of hunting)
afforestation
 information
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it can be concluded that though public festivals
plays
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play
 a paramount role in
human'
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human life, but
human life but
human' life but
life
 but regime ought to invest some bucks on
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 purposes
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According to my point of view
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another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 useful purposes
also
 play an important role in general
public's
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public
life
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