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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

#internet #access #information #minutes
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 has a great impact on
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 technology and on our daily life. There is no question that
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the internet
 has improved our
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 to
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 greatly, but the question is how extended we has to use it.
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 technology has changed a lot in 21th century. In fact, it is the biggest revolution in
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 century. Credit goes to
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, changed the
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 of
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 to
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. Now a day, we can do anything using
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, best example is e-commerce which revolutionised the shopping experience. We can buy matchbox to
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. When it comes to
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, it is at its best. We can know about anything current politics to history of countries, online lectures to live movies what's not? The whole globe is our hands. There are a lot of examples in my life that's how it is influenced and increased the
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. In my Master's, I'm writing thesis regarding "String theory" and I struggled to get references on
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 theory in my university library.
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 I went through
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 to find some previous works and I found nearly ten fantastic journals on
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 theory. I can't even imagine my work, and today's world without
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, there are some pitfalls that can easily raise a debate on usage of
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. Especially the children's exposure to adult content in
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 which is a real issue in today's society. It is influencing teenager's behaviour a wild
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. There are a lot reports supporting
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 issue. Many countries are trying to ban
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to
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 content, but it is very hard seems like almost impossible. The only
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 to stop
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 is to create awareness in parents and teenagers, so we can control in a friendly environment. To conclude, every coin has two sides,
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the internet
 has changed the
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 people
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information
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 at the same time created some new issues, so we should know the limits of usage.
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