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Which is better ? Living in large area or small community

#area #community
In the past, most of people lived in a small village
also
 population of the world was more or less than now. Nowadays population is too high and
City
 or village growing up. Live in the urban area with the pollution is too hard, but the most of the people have to live in
city
Suggestion
a city
 because
city
 and urban area have industry and better situation than rural area. Most of people for start their life come to
City
Suggestion
the City
 they accept suffers because they don'
t
 have any any choice they should work and build their lives. Rural areas and small community don'
t
 have the economical situation so people who live in rural areas have less salary than people in
city
Suggestion
the city
cities
a city
. When you live in a small society you know other and have social connection with them so you know their problems and you struggle to solve their problems life in a small society can be very beautiful than large society in my idea the government should help the economy and do some work that people live in rural areas have a good situation and they don'
t
 have to migrate to Cities if people don'
t
 go to cities population of
city
 have decreased and pollution and noise and very problems will disappear

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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