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Using social media as Facebook,Twitter is replacing face to face communication in this century. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There have been an increasing number of people who use social networks
such
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 as
Facebook
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 and
Twitter
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 and less face to face communication in recent days. I will investigate the advantages and disadvantages in
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 essay.
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 of all, it is undeniable that the social networking sites are the major platform on the internet for communication and exchange of information since the early 21st century. Regarding to
this
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, people from all around the world started using to connect with friends and family members to share and communicate through photos or text messages. There are a large number of software to connect with.
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, two
main
the force of workers available
men
 of them, and the most useable are
Facebook
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 and
Twitter
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.
For instance
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, networking without border is one of the noteworthy advantages of social sites, because it enables everyone to connect no matter with a country they belong to.
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 of all, in today's modernized era the networking sites give not only the fastest way to connect with friends and family, but
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 it is a great marketing channel for business.
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 is where the business can cash in and leverage presence of people on social media. To illustrate,
Facebook
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 alone has 2.26 billion users and
Twitter
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 in a close
second
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 at 1.9 billion users. These platforms are creating a great opportunity where small businesses can start marketing.
On the other hand
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, it is frequently noted that people become less communicative and
rudder
red color or pigment; the chromatic color resembling the hue of blood
redder
 with each day. The compulsive behaviour developed due to social networking sites like
Facebook
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 and
Twitter
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 leads to negative effects. It becomes as a global problem.
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, social media addict checks out people's profiles for hours, which can make users dependent. Researchers concluded that social media addiction can be stronger than
addiction
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the addiction
 to cigarettes and alcohol.
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, these networks bring a great amount of
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 aspects. To conclude, from aforementioned points it is clear that even if the social sites have hundreds of benefits cannot be ignored that it have one big drawback.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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