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Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go on the trip • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask other questions about the trip

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Dear Mr. Singh, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in going on a
trip
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 to the USA as a parent volunteer. My daughter name Riya, is supposed to join
this
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trip
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 , so that will provide accompany to her and reassurance as well. I visited
to
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apply
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USA
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the USA
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 several times before, for work purposes being a
trip
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 organiser and familiar with all the things including weather or food. Being a parent volunteer, I will make sure about the discipline and safety of each and every child by checking them frequently. I might be able to make some suggestions regarding activities that will be played during the
trip
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as well as
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 share my reviews about food that I tried there before which may help to choose the best meal for children. I would like to know some of the questions including accommodation or travel information for arrival or departure. Well, I
also
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 have a query about the travelling from
airport
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the airport
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 to the accommodation area. Could you please forward me all the details on my email address
.
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 Thanks in advance. Yours sincerely, Kirandeep Kaur.

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Grammar/Conventions
Ensure all names are capitalized correctly. For example, write 'Riya's name' instead of 'Riya, name'.
Content Development
You might want to add more details about your past trips to the USA to give a clearer picture of your familiarity with the country.
Clarity
The letter clearly states why you want to go on the trip and what assistance you can provide during the trip.
Tone
The letter maintains a suitable formal tone throughout, appropriate for addressing a headteacher.
Format
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Chaperone
  • Itinerary
  • Accommodations
  • Logistics
  • Overseeing
  • Cultural exchange
  • Assist
  • Supervise
  • Engage
  • Responsibilities
  • Bilingual
  • First aid certified
  • Emergency protocols
  • Team-building activities
  • Communication skills
  • Safety measures
  • Childcare experience
  • Transport arrangements
  • Educational objectives
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