The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps provided below present information about the alteration of the West Park Secondary School in the period from 1950 to 2010.
According to
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the maps, the school building was situated on the right side along the main road. There were the houses
next
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to the building which had been completely destroyed in 1980
whereas
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the science block and car park
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constructed. The other remarkable change took place in the location of the farmland behind the house which had been turned into
the
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sports field in 1980. The playground,
likewise
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, the Main building
was
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remained untouched through the period from 1950 to 2010.
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,
the
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significant modification occurred in the sports field, it was cut down,
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, the parking space was enlarged and took the entire place behind the science block, where the sports ground
partly
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situated before. In conclusion, it is explicitly observed that the area was modernized through the 60 years of its construction.
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