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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Citizens of a
country
 should expect that immigrants follow their customs and traditions when they start living in the
country
. I totally agree with
this
 and I think that new immigrants must behave according the citizens's traditions.
First
 of all, it is known that when people start living in a new
country
, they take their traditions with them and
also
 bad behaviours that do not fit in the new
country
.
This
 means, that citizens will disapprove any behaviour
that is
 against their traditions,
therefore
, the immigrant could have a misconception of the
country
 lifestyle.
For example
, if a citizen of a Latin American
country
immigrates
leave one's country of residence for a new one
emigrates
 to England, and he keeps doing the same things he did in his
country
 like playing loud music in his house, English people will call the police and could have a fight with him.
Secondly
, when a person immigrates to another
country
, it is because he wants to live differently, and to have new opportunities. Following the customs and traditions of a new
country
, will help him to adapt easily in the
country
,
thus
, his life in the
country
 will be fluent according the citizens's lifestyle.
For instance
, immigrating to a new
country
 following the way citizens live, it could help a lot in the
adaptability
Suggestion
adaptation
adaptive
 process for
this
 person, and
as a result
 he will fit faster that immigrants that don't follow their traditions. In conclusion, following the customs and traditions of a new
country
 will help new immigrants adapt faster to the citizens's lifestyle, and
also
 to have a better social acceptance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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