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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with that?

#climate #change
I
use
 public transport to arrive to my office. I am working in a university. It is close to me, so I just take
minibus
Suggestion
a minibus
the minibus
. I always
use
 the minibus because it takes less
time
 to reach the destination via minibus.
Firstly
, it is less crowded compared to municipal busses.
Secondly
, it does not stop very often compared to the busses.
there
Suggestion
There
 is traffic congestion on motorways. If people were promoted to
use
 public transport more, there would be less traffic on motorways, and I can arrive to my destination point in shorter
time
. I want to talk about my wireless
bluetooth
(computing, trademark) a short range wireless technology for connecting different devices such as computers and mobile phones
Bluetooth
 speaker. It bough it on Amazon US because it was cheaper in US than Turkey. I ordered it almost one and half years ago. It was delivered in very short
time even
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time, even
 if it was shipped from USA. I love it because it has some unique features.
For example
, it has a feature of noise cancelation, so when you put on the headphone and turn the music on, you are not disturbed by any noises. It has a feature of
bluetooth
(computing, trademark) a short range wireless technology for connecting different devices such as computers and mobile phones
Bluetooth
, so that you don't need any cable to connect it with a phone. It was easy to learn how to
use
 it. Even one who is not familiar with to the technology can learn it in a short
time
. Sometimes my mother
use
Suggestion
uses
 it, and she doesn't face any problem while using it. People
use
 washing machine,
dish washer
a machine for washing dishes
dishwasher
, drying machine
, vacuum cleaner to
Suggestion
, vacuum cleaner,
 clean their houses in my country. They help people much while cleaning the house because people save
time
 thanks to these machines, and
also
 they get less tired, but these machines may have negative impacts on
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 if people don't benefit from them responsibly.
For example
, if you
use
 your
dish washer
a machine for washing dishes
dishwasher
 more than once a day, it consumes more electricity and water. We, in the world, have a
finited
bounded or limited in magnitude or spatial or temporal extent
finite
 sources of water I think, in the near future, almost all houses will be equipped with household machines at least in my country. Everybody would want to have these machines and spend less
time
 on house cleaning and feel less tired.

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