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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
It is often argued that the human
life
 had been better before the industrial revolution.
Although
 I agree that the
world
 was more favourable with less
technology
. I think we couldn’t have made our lives easier without a well-developed
technology
. On the one hand, the people spent a simple
life
 with less needs with less
technology
 few centuries ago. They didn’t pursue for the endless desires like in modern days. They could keep the environment free from pollutants where they used to use the buffalo driven vehicles,
find
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finds
 food from their surroundings, build houses from natural material and make clothes from manual weaving machines etc. Their minds were free and most of the renowned poets, writers and playwrights were gifted to the
world
.
Thus
, we can say that it is the real
life
 where we can be with the nature with less
burdens
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burden
.
On the other hand
,
technology
 cannot be totally eliminated from the
world
 as it is the only tool which can connect the nations together and technological advancement brings us solutions for many problems faced in different fields
such
 as resource management, transportation, communication and agriculture etc.
if
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If
 the countries refused
technology
, they could have been isolated with no
socio economic
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social economic
socioeconomic
source economic
 development at all and human lives could be limited only for the basic activities like farming, hunting, eating and sleeping etc.
that
Suggestion
That
 is why
technology
 has been an important aspect of
life
 over the past century. To conclude, though I agree that the
life
 was
simple
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simpler
 and more comfortable with less
technology
, I think we should never forget the fact that the
world
 has developed
this
 far with the aid of
technology
.
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