The line graph illustrates the number of visitors in millions from the UK who went abroad and those that came to the UK between 1979 and 1999, while the bar chart shows which countries were the most popular for UK residents to visit in 1999.

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The given charts indicate the

number

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of people who came and moved from the United Kingdom in the period from 1979 to 1999 and

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the share

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individuals who went overseas in 1990, respectively.

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, it can be seen that the most popular country visited by

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residents

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was France

whereas

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, the less popular country was Turkey.

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, the proportion of

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residents

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who went abroad

exceed

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the

number

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of people who came to the

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in the given timescale. Interestingly, the

number

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of visitors and

residents

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who came to the

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and went abroad stood at the same level merely, 10

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in 1979. The given trend

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rose significantly to just over 50

million

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and approximately just under 30

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. The given trends had an upward trend during the period.

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the other hand, in 1999 the

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people who moved to Spain is almost equal to

France

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France's

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visitors, respectively 9

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and just over 10

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. Fewer

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residents

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moved to Greece than the USA, nearly 4

million

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and 5

million

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accordingly

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, uk, residents, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

177 words

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