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Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it’s advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, more and more high-rise buildings have sprung up in central cities. High-rise living is assumed by some people to be bad
since
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for
 high-rise apartments cause people to feel lonely and unhappy.
However
, others
believes
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believe
 high-rise buildings own many merits.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
such
 apartments. People who live in high-rise apartments tent to feel lonely. They find it difficult to maintain an enduring relationship with each other, because most of them only rent apartments and move around a lot. They hardly communicate with
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
, so the sense of belongings is absent among these residents. When they encounter problems in life, they feel helpless and depressed.
Moreover
, high-rise apartments are normally in heavily populated urban areas and people may live in cramped conditions.
For instance
, there is no adequate space
such
 as private backyards and playgrounds for holding parties. People are more likely to live a reclusive life.
This
 is less likely to happen in low-density
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhoods
. On the positive side, living in high-rise apartments allow people to do some leisure activities with their friends because there are a lot of recreational facilities in the city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
.
For example
, residents find it easier to go some gyms and clubs nearby with their friends.
This
 can enrich their social life and give them a sense of happiness. In conclusion, high-rise apartments have some demerits
such
 as
lonely
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loneliness
, cramped.
However
, it provides convenience lifestyle and high living standards, which I believe is much more important for most of
people
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the people
.

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