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Scientific research should be primarily funded by governments instead of commercial companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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sciencetific
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
research
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 should conduct by
government
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 not
private
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a private company
company
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 because
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government
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the government
 should raise commercial real estate and
research
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 development funded by
community
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community, therefore
therefore
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sciencetific
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
research
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 make
experiment explore
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experiment, explore
experimentally explore
experimentally experimentally explore
 the world
instead
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 of private Commercial
company
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 investment into
market
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the market
 to gain access profit margin eventually
government
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 should
funded
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fund
researchment
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center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
,
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,
I
also
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 mean anybody can fund
research
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 and development while many majority people believe that fund by
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government
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the government
.
goverment
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The government
Government
Goverment
 might miss some area
devolepment but
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development, but
development but
private Commercial
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a private commercial company
a private Commercial company
private Commercial companies
company
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 can look into
matter
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the matter
.
private
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Private
 companies sometimes
hestited
pause or hold back in uncertainty or unwillingness
hesitated
 to spend more amount of
money
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money, hence
hence
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government
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the government
 should take the initiative
,
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,
on the other
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hand I
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hand, I
 believe that
research
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 should not only be conducted by the
government
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.
private
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Private companies
Private company
The private company
company
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should
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should also give
should also be given
also
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 be give authority to carry out some
research
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 fullness
.
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.
one
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One
 of the prime
reason
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reasons
 for the
some
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
 is that the some of researcher is very wide and it's possible the
government
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.
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therefore some
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Therefore, some
Therefore some
 said line must be provided to these
authority
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authorities
 to avoid adverse
conquence
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
.
For instance
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,
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,
if private
company
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 are
force
Suggestion
forced
 to
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research explore
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research, explore
 harmful atomic energy resources they can use
this
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 to effect the mankind,
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government
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the government
 should take responsibility to carry out
research
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,
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however
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however, research
research
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 carried out by private companies and controlled and maintain by the
government
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 any meet to avoid negative affect.
Although
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 Public awareness about commercial companies fund or their organisation along with
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research development
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research, development
moreover
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 anything
research
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 was done by
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government
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the government
,
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,
must be
support
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supported
 by the public poll was planned
stertgic
relating to or concerned with strategy
strategic
 goal and orientation.R

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • carried out
  • controlled
  • governments
  • private companies
  • unbiased
  • prioritize
  • profit
  • public interest
  • allocate resources
  • lucrative
  • collaboration
  • information sharing
  • confidential
  • competitive advantage
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