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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#people #choices
It is often maintained that we have too many choices nowadays. From my point of view, I totally agree with
this
 statement, and I believe that the Internet and globalization are the two main factors.
To begin
 with, the Internet had led to a dramatic expansion in the number of choices.
For instance
, the number of online media services now are
almost
Suggestion
now is
 endless. There are countless websites of entertainment, news, videos, TV shows and music, many of
such
 are free. These abundance medias
lead t
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
o the confusion of users, as they have so many decisions about the content that they consume. Apart from the practical concern expressed above, I
also
 believe that globalization is the problem of taking too many choices. Cheap international flights have made overseas travel possible for millions of people, but
this
also
 means that we are faced with options when and where to go on holidays. While the opportunity for overseas study seems appealing, many students are confused about where to go and which path to take. To recapitulate, we are faced with a giant number of options in most fields of life, and
this
 is often bewildering than beneficial.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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