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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than the advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #car
Owning a
car
 is generally perceived as a
luxury but
Accept comma addition
luxury, but
apparantly
from appearances alone
apparently
 it is often a need for many. People these days prefer to travel through their own vehicle rather commuting through a public transport. Though, they have their set of reason for not choosing the public transport, they end up purchasing an automobile like a
car
. Let us see what could be
merits
Suggestion
merited
 and demerits of owning or commuting through a
car
. The major advantage that the
car
 provides is the safety. The cars are equipped with safety measures like airbags; which saves the life of the commuter in case of any mishap.
Secondly
, the four-wheeler comes with a roof, which protects the traveller in all weathers. The
car
 can hold multiple commuters, so one can go on a holiday in a
car
 with the family.
Nevertheless
, it can
also
 be used in case of any medical emergencies. The major drawback that people see is the
cost
 of owning a
car
 and its maintenance. The maintenance
cost
 is very high considering the fuel charges and repairs.
Also
 the parking space is a problem in many countries and the
cost
 of parking is
also
 high. Some countries like Singapore; have strict policies and guidelines for people to go through before purchasing a
car
 which makes it difficult for them to own one. As we know, every coin has two sides and it depends on what we are looking at. When we do a
cost
 and benefit analysis, I feel that the
car
 has more perks to serve and it
overweighs
in other respects or ways
otherwise
overweights
 the disadvantages.

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