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The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below shows changes in modes of transport chosen by travellers in European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the transformation in
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 of modes of commutating by
people
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 from 1950 to 1990. The graph reveals that 40%
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people
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of people
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 chose to commute on foot in 1950 followed by 32% who opted for bikes. Almost 20% selected to travel by bus and about 7%
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 travelled by car. The scenario changed and showed a clear shift towards public transport
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in 1970
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 number of
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 32% travelled by bus, followed by 27% who used cars and were in turn followed by 23% who chose bikes. The least proportion of
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 and at that only 17% preferred to walk. In 1990, showed a complete dominance of cars which were the choice of nearly 65%
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people
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. The mode chosen by approximately 16% was the bus, bikes and walking were opted for, by around 10% of travellers each. The graph depicts that cars indeed became the prime choice over the period of four decades for
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 to travel in the European country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • modes of transport
  • travellers
  • European country
  • 1950
  • 1990
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • popularity
  • time periods
  • bicycle
  • walking
  • car
  • public transportation
  • motorcycle
  • increased significantly
  • preferred mode of transport
  • stability
  • slight increase
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