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STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE SO THAT THEY CAN PASS EXAMS, AND SKILLS SUCH AS COOKING OR DRESSING SHOULD NOT BE TAUGHT. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE/DISAGREE

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In
this
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 modern world the main requirements of most people are that students ought to learn more academic knowledge so as to be able to pass the exams.
However
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, I strongly claim that the skills
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 as cooking and dressing are
also
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be
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being
 taught so that they can use these abilities in
every day
found in the ordinary course of events
everyday
 life. In
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 essay I will attempt to throw light on both aspects of
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 argument and reach a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, academic education and qualification are really needed in the future career of students. What I mean by
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 is that even though academic knowledge is demanded only to pass the exams of schools or colleges, is academic qualification required by any company to possess a good working position and satisfying wage.
On the other hand
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, skills to cook and dress are very beneficial in
undergraduates’ lifetime
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an undergraduates’ lifetime, although
an undergraduates’ lifetime although
although
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 both of them are not included in
school programme
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the school programme
school programmes
. It is mainly because, after graduating from schools or
colleges
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college
 students can undoubtedly choose to go abroad to study, if they are
taught to easily
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easily taught to
 take care of themselves with aforementioned abilities.
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, with learning
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 necessary life skills students are capable of succeeding
in
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at
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. Because even at
work
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 they not only should
work
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 efficiently, but
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 they have to follow the rules of culture of dressing. It means, being taught how to dress suitably in various situations and behaving properly can make
positive impression
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a positive impression
 on consumers and other people. In conclusion, in my point of view, though academic knowledge is important for passing the exams, the skills
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 as cooking and dressing have to be taught to students to have a balanced life in both
work
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 and lifetime.
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