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some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to

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In my view, everything has two sides. So, I do not completely agree with the statement that
tourism
 has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. On the hand, thanks to the growth of
tourism
, the level of unemployment goes
dowm
spatially or metaphorically from a higher to a lower level or position
down
, more and more local people have opportunities to get a job and make
money
Accept comma addition
money, such
such
 as opening a restaurant
,
Accept space
,
 hotel, being a tour guide or becoming an office worker in a
tourism
 service office. Most of
tourists
Suggestion
the tourists
 are foreign people so, it is the chance for tourists and local people
exchance
chemical process in which one atom or ion or group changes places with another
exchange
 the culture, learn a new language.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand,
tourism
also
 has harmful effects.

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