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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#children #form #discipline
As per my opinion
,
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,
smacking children is not
correct way
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the correct way
a correct way
 for all the
time
.It
,
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,
s depends on situation because some situation
are we
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are, we
 can handle easily and some
difficulty
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difficult
. So parents choose the correct root to teach their children how to be
discipline
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disciplined
.
First parents should
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First, parents should
 take care of their children when they are babies.They spend most of the
time
 with parents up to three years old during
this
 period kids habituated
discipline
. If
child
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a child
the child
 is crying
want
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wanting
 to something if it necessary we can buy if it's not necessary or more than your budget we should explain whether it is useful or not. No need to go for smacking in that situation.Parents should have more patients to teach
discipline
 to kids.
Secondly whenever
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Secondly, whenever
 kids will go to
school
 teacher will be a responsible person to learn
discipline
 in
school
 hours.
Mostly
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Most
 teachers what they will say to kids follow their rules.
for
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For
 example, each
school
maintain
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maintains
 particular timings if any kid
is not reach
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has not reached
doesn't reach
does not reach
is not reached
 that particular
time
 they may take serious action so indirectly kids learn
puntuality
the quality or habit of adhering to an appointed time
punctuality
. In
school
 hours child has miss behave with another child or staff that
time
 smacking is
correct way
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the correct way
a correct way
 because they do not repeat again. To conclusion, these reasons make me not completely agree with the smacking children.In today
,
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,
s parents
are not agree
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have not agreed
are not agreeing
do not agree
don't agree
are not agreed
 with smacking children it will be depends and their
matuarity
the period of time in your life after your physical growth has stopped and you are fully developed
maturity
 power.
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