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There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a country's identity. What is your opinion?

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Globalization means integrating the world into different political, economic, cultural, social dimensions. The prosperity of each country is essential to its relationship with the rest of the world. What is needed
first
 is familiarity with other cultures, knowing the cultural backgrounds, religious beliefs of the various nations, how to relate to these cultures, and
then
 identifying their own culture. Increasing international relations and foreign business can easily increase a country's knowledge and capital. Improving the Global Position of the Role of Foreign business in Developing Countries is very vibrant and effective, with China, Brazil, India and so on growing rapidly. The future of countries is rooted in foreign commerce and the extent to which they are able to buy or sell goods or services determines their position. Faced with the new day of the world and the lack of revenue sources.
However
, foreign market can be the best way out of the bottlenecks and bring dynamism and prosperity to a land. International relations and trade and commerce have created a social relationship and have been able to minimize racial, ethnic, and regional differences. To sum it up,
although
 foreign business has its weaknesses, in general, the benefits and achievements of the countries active in
this
 field are greater than the losses of a free exchange.
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