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You have paid for a cricket course at a Sports Club, but due to a medical reason cannot complete the entire course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

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Dear Sir, I’m a 26-year-old student and currently persuading Bachelor’s degree-3rd year, in
this
 college which is a 4-year course. I’m writing
this
 letter to let you know
my
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 interest in
cricket
 and a problem I had to face recently. I always had a keen interest in playing
cricket
. Being a big fan of Sachin and Lara, I wished I could play
in
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international
cricket
 once. While in school, with my work hard, I grabbed my place among 11 wonderful players in
school
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the school
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cricket
 team. Now I wish to get an opportunity to play under
the
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excellent supervision and flourish my talent. Meanwhile, I
first
 enrolled for the course
via
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online
on
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last
 Monday. But I met with an accident 2 days before and my leg got fractured. With deep regret, I have to inform you that It is impossible
to
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 me to play
on
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this
 season. Sadly, given my circumstances, I would have to discontinue my membership.
Thus
, I kindly request you to refund me the amount which I paid. Please advise should there be any particular form that I need to fill in. Thank you. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours’s
sincerely
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, Silpa Sujith

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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