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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught . To what extent do you agree/disagree?

#students #exams #skills
Today pupils should get
academic education
Suggestion
an academic education
 in order to pass exams
,
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,
instead
 of wasting time for teaching skills like cooking or dressing
.
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 Some people agree that
this
 kind of teaching can give them enough skills and
knowledge
 to do something or support for passing
exam
Suggestion
the exam
exams
an exam
.
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.
Firstly
, from children should start reading, solving logic and mathematical tasks in order to teach their brain endure challenges from early ages. In
this
years
Suggestion
year
 students who did not study at schools or colleges well could not success in university tests and got low scores
.
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 A good example for
this
 can be pupils who study academic science, they are able to pass exams and easily solve any kind of problems
.
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.
 And
this
 gives chance to study skills without difficulties by using their academic abilities.
Secondly
, not studying academic science may affect negatively to studying skills. For instance, the person who has not any education is going to meditate dressing
skills but
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skills, but
 due to the lack of
mathematic
Suggestion
mathematical
 and geometrical education cannot sew any nice-looking cloth. Without having any
knowledge
 it is hard to achieve what you want.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 makes clear why students should be taught
academic
Suggestion
the academic knowledge
knowledge
 rather than teaching cooking and dressing skills
.
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 In conclusion, academic
knowledge
 should be taught before skills in order to solve challenges that will appear in their future profession. It is recommended that if students won’t be taught academic
knowledge
 they cannot get succeed working with skills
.
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