IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing-Bar Chart: The diagram below shows changes in mode of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing-Bar Chart: The diagram below shows changes in mode of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the information modes of transport and year chosen by percentage of travellers in a European country from 1950 and 1990.
Overall
, the graph reveals that in modes
chose
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chosen
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of
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by
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most other person's car of travellers since 1990,
while
the
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apply
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bikes
and walking were
people
was
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apply
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travelled by over the two periods and change in modes of transport used by
bus
. As can be seen from the chart provide that 20%
people
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of people
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chosen
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chose
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by
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apply
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bus
in 1950,
while
car 8%, and
bikes
32%, and 40%
people
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of people
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used
to
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apply
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bikes
and
walking
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walked
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in 1990, but, the
contrast
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contract
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period of 17%
people
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of people
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preferred to walk. In 1970, the number of
people
sharply inclined 32% and 28% travelled by
bus
and
cars
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car
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,
while
, the
used
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user
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of the
people
22% travelled by
bikes
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bike
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. The below period 1990 used in travel inclined, but the period change in 23%
people
chose the other transport system.  In 1990, the chart showed the number of
people
used to travel by car,
while
the mode chosen
approximately
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was approximately
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17% by
bus
, and
bikes
and walking were opted for, by around 10% of travellers each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words bikes, people, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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