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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing-Bar Chart: The diagram below shows changes in mode of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing-Bar Chart: The diagram below shows changes in mode of transport chosen by travellers in a European country from 1950 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the information modes of transport and year chosen by percentage of travellers in a European country from 1950 and 1990.
Overall
, the graph reveals that in modes
chose
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chosen
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of
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by
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 most other person's car of travellers since 1990,
while
the
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apply
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bikes
 and walking were
people
was
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apply
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travelled by over the two periods and change in modes of transport used by
bus
. As can be seen from the chart provide that 20%
people
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of people
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chosen
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chose
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by
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apply
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bus
 in 1950,
while
 car 8%, and
bikes
 32%, and 40%
people
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of people
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 used
to
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apply
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bikes
 and
walking
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walked
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 in 1990, but, the
contrast
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contract
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 period of 17%
people
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of people
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 preferred to walk. In 1970, the number of
people
 sharply inclined 32% and 28% travelled by
bus
 and
cars
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car
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,
while
, the
used
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user
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 of the
people
 22% travelled by
bikes
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bike
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. The below period 1990 used in travel inclined, but the period change in 23%
people
 chose the other transport system.  In 1990, the chart showed the number of
people
 used to travel by car,
while
 the mode chosen
approximately
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was approximately
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 17% by
bus
, and
bikes
 and walking were opted for, by around 10% of travellers each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bikes, people, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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