Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is sometimes argued that early formal education is a key to success in later life.
However
, some people consider that children under seven should not attend
school
. I firmly believe in the latter. On the one hand, it is thought that it should not be allowed
to begin
education at the age less than 7.
This
is for the reason that
such
children are not completely ready for
school
as their mental development is not sufficient yet. As a consequence, they will face plenty of difficulties in a
school
environment. Not only they would not be able to follow rules and control emotions, but
also
it is almost impossible for that age group to stay focused for a long time and,
as a result
, their well-being may be affected.
For instance
, it has been recently discovered that
such
children feel more anxious and awkward than others. As opposite, some people think that if their child more intelligent than his peers, or gifted, an early entry into
school
must be admitted. There is some benefit in doing so as
this
would allow
such
children to fully fulfil their potential. To illustrate
this
point, gifted children with no intellectual exercising would lose motivation and become bored.
However
, rarely do parents realize that readiness for
school
is
also
about physical development. The youngest students in class often become victims of bullying as the tiniest, and
therefore
, perceived as weak. In conclusion, though people may vary in their attitudes, I am convinced that children need to start
school
only when they are
mature enough both
Suggestion
both mature enough
physically and mentally,
that is
after their seventh birthday.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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