The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart illustrates the
proportion
of energy
consumption whilst the second
chart demonstrates the data on greenhouse
gas
emissions by the respective activities in an average Australian family. Overall
, while
the energy
used in heating keeps the major part, the activity Correct pronoun usage
that contributes
contributes
the largest Wrong verb form
contributing
proportion
of greenhouse
gas
emission
is water heating. Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
Which
means, if an activity consumes much Correct pronoun usage
This
energy
, it is not sufficient to make sure that it emits the largest amount of greenhouse
gas
.
Although
nearly a
half of Correct article usage
apply
total
Correct article usage
the total
energy
(42%) is spent on heating, only 15% greenhouse
Change preposition
of greenhouse
gas
emitted
by Add a missing verb
is emitted
this
activity. On the other hand
, the proportion
of energy
use and greenhouse
gas
are
approximately the same for water heating (30%, Change the verb form
is
32
%, respectively) and Correct word choice
and 32
the
cooling (2%,Correct article usage
apply
3
% respectively). Correct word choice
and 3
Besides
, there are some of the activities that energy
use proportion
is just nearly a
half of Correct article usage
apply
proportion
of Correct article usage
the proportion
greenhouse
gas
they emit, such
as refrigeration, lighting and other appliances.Submitted by luunguyetlinh1610 on
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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