The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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percentages in typical meals of the three types of nutrients all of which are

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eaten too much based on

sodium

, saturated fat and added sugars consumed in the USA.

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sodium

and saturated fat occupied the highest position

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dinner

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snack

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side, breakfast is the lowest sector in all of

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without

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that

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start with, multifarious typical meals consumed in the USA. Fast of all,

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the

sodium

hitting a low point are

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and breakfast these

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are individually 14%

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. After that, lunch

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of dinners is

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top one figure.

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29% and 43%.

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ration

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is a bit higher compared to

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sodium

. In saturated fat

snack

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are

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a little more slowly and the

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part dinner and lunch going

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downward rather than

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added sugar all of the sectors’

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are completely changed

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sectors. End of

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percentage

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are 21%, 16%, 26%, and 37% in

snack

, breakfast, lunch and dinner.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, snack with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

205 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
Lifestyle choices
Healthy eating habits
Dietary recommendations

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Some people think that businesses should provide sports facilities foremployees. Others consider that a person’s health is their own responsibility, not a company’s problem. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think it does not matter if a professional sportsman or sportswoman misbehaves on or off the field if they play well. What is your opinion about this?

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion？

Levels of consumer debt are increasing across the world. To address this, a new subject should be introduced in secondary schools: how to manage personal finances. To what extent do you agree with this statement?