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Nowadays education quality is very low. Some people think we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers others believe that it will result in a loss of respect and disciyin the classroom. Discuss both the sides.

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 is often one of the top priorities in every education system. In some cultures, high school
students
 are encouraged to give their opinions about
teachers
, but I believe that
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 can
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 of respect and discipline in the classroom. On the one hand, it is true that feedback from learners may contribute to an improvement in educational quality. In many cases, the level of comprehension of
students
 relies very much not on the content of the practice but on the way
teachers
 conduct it. If,
for example
, the class is slow, it will be ineffective for
teachers
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 too fast so that most
students
 fail to retain the information. Without the comments of
students
, it would be difficult to know whether the speed of the lesson is appropriate for the class, which may eventually impair the nature of the exercise.
However
, there are several drawbacks
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 allowing
students
 to make comments and criticism on their
teachers
.
Firstly
,
teachers
 can be vulnerable to the negative words of
students
. Many will feel that their efforts in delivering the reading deserve praise rather than criticism or any form of feedback.
This
 idea is commonly shared by
teachers
 in the education systems of many Asian countries.
Secondly
, the classroom may be in chaos
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 of comments. Opinions vary from
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, and it would be impractical for
teachers
 to work out a way of teaching that can satisfy all
students
. In conclusion, it seems to me that encouraging high school
students
 to comment about their
teachers
 does not necessarily mean an improvement in character education.
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task response
The introduction and conclusion are present but need further development. The main points are somewhat supported but the essay lacks clear comprehensive ideas and relevant specific examples. It is important to stay focused on the topic and provide more specific and relevant examples to support the arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure is somewhat clear but it could be improved with better organization and clearer linkage of ideas. The introduction and conclusion need further development to provide a better framework for the essay.

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