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Most people prefer ready to eat food rather than homemade food now. Do you think it has more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Urbanization and modernization has fast paced our daily routines. Many people argue that processed
food
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, which is easy to cook in
few minutes
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a few minutes
, is the best
option
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 to eat. While others opine that freshly cooked
food
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 is the best
food
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 for a healthy body and mind. I personally feel, that ready to eat meals have more shortfalls than its benefits. On the one hand, people who are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of processed
food
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 argue that ready to eat meals
provide
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provided
 them with the best
option
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, as these meals are
widey
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wide y
 available at all places and do not require much effort to make them ready to eat. They
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 argue that
this
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 type of
food
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also
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 retains most of its
nutrion
(physiology) the organic process of nourishing or being nourished; the processes by which an organism assimilates food and uses it for growth and maintenance
nutrition
nutrient
 value. Ready to eat meals generally costs less than the
option
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 of cooking fresh
food
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.
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, it saves the most precious time, which can be
further
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 used effectively in doing some work. On the flip side,
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 processed
food
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 when consumed for a
longer
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long
 duration can result in various detrimental effects on one's
health
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. They contain
high
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high amounts
a high amount
amount
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 of
sturated
being the most concentrated solution possible at a given temperature; unable to dissolve still more of a substance
saturated
 fat and sodium, which can gradually make people obese and unhealthy. These ready to eat meals contains high
amount
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 of preservatives, which have
direct effect
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a direct effect
 on human's mental and physical
health
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, especially
on
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in
of
with
 cognitive and kinetic development of an offspring.
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, homemade
food
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 takes time to get ready and is
costlier
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a costly option
costly option
option
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 than the former, but
this
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 freshly cooked
food
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 has all
health
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 benefits, as it has
highest
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the highest amount
high amount
the higher amount
amount
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 of nutrition value. It supplies all essential vitamins and minerals that are required by a human body.
Recent study
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A recent study
Recent studies
 from Harvard says that in developed countries like UK and US, since the disposable income is much more than other countries, people
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have become
more fond
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fonder
 of ready to eat meals, and
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, these countries have
maximum
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the maximum amount
a maximum amount
amount
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 of
obese
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obesity
 cases. To sum up, I strongly contend that though ready to eat meals have cost and time benefits that make
this
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option
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 much more convenient, but, there is no comparison to the home cooked
food
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. Since, home cooked
food
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 is best for right cognitive and physical
health
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 of people, needless to say that its pros outweighs is
cons
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a cons
.
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