As a result of tourism and increasing number of people traveling there is growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on environment? What measures should be taken?

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Tourism is ever growing industry at
faster pace
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a faster pace
. It has led to
increased travelling
Suggestion
the increased travelling
of people from one place to another. Air routes are considered to be the fastest and easiest mode of travelling. Increasing demands for more flights has increased its
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
effects on
environment
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the environment
. With every passing
day
Use synonyms
,
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
is decreasing
day
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by
day
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exposing
earth
Suggestion
the earth
to ultraviolet rays directly. Now its the high time that we should take measures to decrease air pollution. To illustrate
this
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70% of air pollution is caused by burning of raw materials used in planes which emit carbon monoxide that deplete
ozone layer
Suggestion
the ozone layer
. One of the best
measure
Suggestion
measures
that can be taken is to increase the tax and fares of tickets. Travelling through other means
shouldbe encourage
Suggestion
should be encouraged
should be encourage
in areas where it is possible. Number of seats for passengers can be
increase
Suggestion
increased
in one flight with proper management so that one flight
canbe
Suggestion
can be
sufficient rather than multiple. People should be educated through different media to increase awareness regarding air pollution so that they can play their role as well. They can play their part in saving resources. To recapitulate, our mother earth is turning into a boiling pot with every passing
day
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. We need to save it before
its
it is
it's
too late.
Although
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scientists are playing their part in making vehicles that consumes less fuel and are
environment
Suggestion
environmentally
friendly but
Accept comma addition
friendly, but
we have to be responsible and should make our attitude environment friendly, keeping in mind that
individual
Suggestion
individuals
an individual
can bring the change.
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