how elderly people spend time in the US from1980-2010

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The line graph provides the information about five distinct types of leisure activities preferred by senior citizens in the United States during the past three decades (1980-2010). Overall, it is clear that watching tv was the most popular activity over most of the period.
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, notwithstanding that hiking and surfing the internet
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to be
the least chosen
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activity
in the beginning, they saw the most dramatic changes throughout the whole period compared to all the other categories. In the
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two decades, the proportion of elderly people going hiking increased exponentially by 40%, reaching three fifths. The positive changes could
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be seen in the other two categories, namely watching TV and surfing the net both of which experienced slight growths by 10%, making up 70% and 15% respectively. Turning to the percentage of those who preferred reading or visiting the theatre, numbers fluctuated. From 2000 onwards, the percentage of old people hiking continued its upward trend and outnumbered those watching tv reaching its highest point (80%). While the figures for the elderly going to the theatre saw a slight increase, there was an abrupt rise in both reading and internet surfing from 20% to 60% and 15% to 50%, respectively

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