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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweight the disadvantages?

#cars #outweight
The
car
 has become an article of dress in contemporary society without feel uncertain,
unclade
having removed clothing
unclad
 and incomplete.
Moreover
,
car
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the car
 has advantages
outstips
be or do something to a greater degree
outstrips
 its disadvantages.
However
,
car
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the car
 has some negative
aspects but
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aspects, but
 only
few
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a few
. The increase pollution, traffic jams, accidents and natural sequel to the burgeoning population of cars. As well, we prefer to drive a
car
 without walking or cycling as a
consequences
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consequence
 can be
increade
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
increased
incurred
 obesity or a number of diseases.
On the other hand
, according to my perspective,
advantages
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the advantages
 of a
car
is
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are
 more significant. The most important advantage is freedom of movement. We can save time and distance because of using
car
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the car
a car
cars
. We don’t need public transportation, and people can move
distance
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a distance
 to distance.
Therefore
, time barrier cannot consider, and people can go around with families.
This
 is very helpful when elderly or
disable
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disabled
 people in
family
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the family
a family
.
Furthermore
, the automatic industry
provide
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provides
 jobs for million of people. As well, automobile boost country’s economy.
For instance
, India spread automobile industry because of these profits. The advantages of using
car
 and disadvantages are
on
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in
 balance.
However
, we should concern to use
proper way
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the proper way
 to minimize the demerits.
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