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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. To what extend do you agree?

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Due to the technological sophisticated world which we live in, genetic engineering
is becomes
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has become
is becoming
 some people concern
as a result
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 of
enormouse
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
 development and they reckon
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science
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 should be restricted. I totally disagree with
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 opinion due to the reasons which I mention in
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 essay.
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, it is clear that genetic engineering brought huge benefits to people’s life in terms of fruit and vegetable productions. As a regards of
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 technology overwhelmed
amount
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the amount
 of crops can produce so that more export opportunities
are gain
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are also gaining
are gaining also
also
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 more people can take initial routine needs of their life easily.
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, another advantage of genetic engineering is on health.
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 phenomenon helps
science
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 to develop new methods in curing multiple
health disease
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health, disease
such
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 as cancer,
alzheimer
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Alzheimer
 and
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 effort help
lots
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lot
 of people to be cured and have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to live without even pain with assistant of
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 gene therapy. On the flip side, some critics claim other aspects of genetic engineering. They believed that the crops which produce with
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science
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 are not
nutrition enough
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enough nutrition
 for body as some hormones are injected to fruits so that they can
defeats
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defeat
 harmful pests but these products are unnatural and they can harm people’s body.
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Also some
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Also, some
 other concern about ethical problems which it could
leads
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lead
 as
result
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a result
 of no limitations. But limitations is not going to work and will may cause to encourage
sciences
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the sciences
 to uncover even new and harmful technology for society and
also
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this
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 will avoids
humans
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human
 benefits which they gain from
this
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science
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. Putting some observation and
strikely
restricted to something
strictly
 supervise can really help to be in a correct way of achievement. In conclusion, there are some shortcomings in genetic
engineering but
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engineering, but
 is should not restrict and put
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 obstacle in
development
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the development
 of technology.

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